Sometimes
Even in the midst of joy,
There is sadness…
Sometimes
Even below the crooked smile
there is a hurt heart…
Sometimes
It seems the whole world
Conspires against you…
Sometimes
It feels as if there is
Just no one…
Sometimes
Even among your close ones
You don’t find a well wisher…
Sometimes
Your mind & heart
Have a messy fight…
Sometimes
You feel everything is distorted
& you don’t feel alright…
Sometimes
The face of life seems so sad
& all your plans just turn bad…
Sometimes
Your headaches so hard
& there is no medicine near or far…
Sometimes
You have to be mute
Even when the words want to flow out…
Sometimes
You are asked to shut up
Even when you know your advice is the best…
Sometimes
You are neglected
Even though you feel your presence will make a difference…
Sometimes
Life becomes so tough that
You are tired to carry your own weight…
Sometimes
You let your tears fall down
Because the ink and paper are over!!
There’s so much pain in this piece. You display the emotions beautifully.
Thank you so much!
Have a great day ahead..
Very nice but sad and depressing. But then these “Sometimes” are facts of life. Wish you face least of such times !!
Life is twisted, only time reveals whats in it for you…
love the formatting and tercet style. Conetent is great, too.
oops–please fix typo on “content.”..sorry…
I do not wish to be rude but tyo’s do not count in poetry (in my humble opinion)
It is called poetic or artistic licence and the rules are suspended and the ideas flow through.
I meant MY typo…in my comment. I misspelled “content”. I would NEVER presume to so instruct a poet. And you are in no need, Gently Stitched! Sorry I wasn’t clear…maybe the typo, hehe
Oh how funny!
Ladies, Peace
Have a good day!
Combining crookedness with heart looks strange.
Yes, indeed. Maybe I’ll re-write this some day…
This one is almost 7-8 years old.
Well said!
Thank you!
our dear hearts can feel so much and clever people like yourself can describe it.
I feel, only women can describe such minute feelings. Men are broad spectrum, when it comes to expressing feelings.
Beautiful, Sakshi. So expressive….I can relate to all of your sometimes. You’ve found a new follower in me. Write on….
Hey LotusGirl,
Thank you for your appreciation! And I, too, can relate to most of the “sometimes” here
At first I thought this was a chiasmus. I enjoyed the form you used.
I haven’t tried writing a chiasmus, maybe I will… Thank you for putting that thought in me!
I continue:
Everything seems to go well,
But soon I find like a flattened Tyre.
All is optimistic,
It is drastic to note everything fails.
It is all pleasurable,
Till I found dribbling in pain.
All was promising
But everything ended in failure.
Morning was glorious,
Evening was a despair.
The greatest solace,
Turned into a quagmire.
God was my only support,
That paled into a mirage.
I loved all,
All proved to be my foes.
***
…this way we can write hundred things S.
You are your own PEACE.
PEACE IS OUR ACTUAL STUFF!
***
Your are a rare sensitive being.
Keep going.
Laurels await you!
(Laurel means: wreath of laurel conferred as a mark of honor in ancient times upon poets, heroes, and victors in athletic contests. Often used in the plural.
Honor and glory won for great achievement.)
I am extra-over-the-board-sensitive and descriptive. I could not stop writing this poem. I can continue it endlessly!
But, thank you for the motivation. *peace*
ha ha ha!
I love your poetry. Maybe when my blog is a little more established you might be gracious enough to do a guest post? Your perfectly chosen words would be so appropriate for my topic. In the meantime, I’ll be back to visit.
I would love a guest post. I haven’t done that yet
It’ll be a first time. Let me know, maybe we both can cook something together and then present it. Whatsay?
I liked this and how you formatted it back and forth. Very nice
Creative head
Thanks for dropping by!
The words you use beautifully capture the emotion. The arrangement of the stanzas is very innovative!! keep writing!
Thank you so much! Glad you liked the visual effect of lines…